New Volume- #2

Cherry

By cigarettes and scribbles

Sun, 09 Dec 2012
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Your image fills me with happiness
like a new chapter in a story, our story.
Flicking through the pages to see what's in store,
although it just makes me want you- more and more.
I read each word as we take each step-
hand in hand, falling further in love.

Though a story’s not complete without
a twist in plot- as quickly we were bonded
you fade away like an eraser to the graphite
of my mind… further and further.
I reach the back cover.

Do I read on or just wallow in self pity.
Chapter one I read, just like before-
naive to the plot that's in store.
As character development goes- the
metaphor of time, I heal to find
that through the looking glass and defeat
is a new beginning- a new volume, a new lust.

Certificate U
Poem
Poetry
Love

Comments

Submitted by scratch on
Another good one Mathew. In fact I think that this is the best one of yours that I have read to date. Just a couple of purely subjective points if I may? Third line stanza 1: whats (what's) Third line stanza 2: like and (an) Third line stanza 3: thats (that's) I would rather you use a capital for i (I) I love the eraser/graphite image and the flow of the whole thing is exemplary. You are getting better and better. Keep going.

 

Submitted by cigarettes and ... on
Thank you so much! :3 and cheers for the corrections~ its what happens when i type late at night!