Grey

By Miriam

Sun, 15 Feb 2009

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3 comments

Not the grey of drab school uniform
Nor mean striplighted room post six
Giving metaphor to your boredom
Pallor akin to sickly skin

His grey is opalescent
Rises and lessens
In tide and ebb of day
Granite lesions blue
Sun of Northumbrian coast
Grey - a reserved hue
Unshowy
New

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'Not the grey of drab school

Permalink Submitted by sean mcnulty on Sun, 2009-02-15 19:14

'Not the grey of drab school uniform' - wonderful opening line.

I think this is really well

Permalink Submitted by onemorething on Sun, 2009-02-15 19:24

I think this is really well done. I like 'nor mean striplighted room post six giving metaphor to your boredom' and all of the second stanza. I'm not sure I get 'new' though. I don't think of grey as new, but maybe that's just me or I misunderstood.

Thanks very much guys;

Permalink Submitted by Miriam on Sun, 2009-02-15 19:29

Thanks very much guys; that's really heartening. I know what you mean about the last word. I think I'm rediscovering it because the person is new, but perhaps the rhyme there is forced...