Supernova

By MistakenMagic

Wed, 24 Mar 2010

5410 reads

22 comments

I am a walking supernova,
collapsing in on myself - slowly, slowly
imploding under the weight
of your indifference to my existence.

Your gravity, your touch -
is all too much to bear
and I'm burning, blazing
with a thousand crazy gasses

that flare inside my head.
Love, this is what you do to me -
but I let you ... Each day
I'm destroying myself - all for you.

This is my gift: death. Decay.
Because of you I'm wasting away,
inside out. It hurts like hell -
but isn't this pain glorious? Addictive?

Just like you; you are this pain.
And I can't stop - won't!
Just continue to moan and twist
in this exquisite agony, its burn and bite ...

Until it all ends in a release. Explosion.
A flash of beautiful light.

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Comments

Emotive, powerful, well

Permalink Submitted by kheldar on Wed, 2010-03-24 23:17

Emotive, powerful, well written - I'm only sorry that your pain is so real. David xxx :--)

I can only echo David's

Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on Wed, 2010-03-24 23:49

I can only echo David's words. A beautifully crafted poem, showcasing your wonderful gift for imagery, illustrated by this stanza particularly:- "Your gravity, your touch - is all too much to bear and I'm burning, blazing with a thousand crazy gasses..." Tina XX

Yes, the analogy you make is

Permalink Submitted by rjnewlyn on Thu, 2010-03-25 00:53

Yes, the analogy you make is a very good one. All those explosions going on in space that are too huge to imagine and yet seem distant and meaningless. And all these explosions that go on inside us that are in many ways still more vast. Or something like that ... Wonderful.

Thank you, David! Aww you

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Thu, 2010-03-25 10:31

Thank you, David! Aww you don't have to be sorry - that's just me, I have done and will sacrifice my own sanity for the sake of some people! ;) Magic xxx

Thanks Tina! I think those

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Thu, 2010-03-25 10:14

Thanks Tina! I think those are some of my favourite lines too :) Magic xxx

Thank you Rob! I think

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Thu, 2010-03-25 10:15

Thank you Rob! I think you're very right about our own explosions in comparison to the real astronomical ones ;) Glad you like this one! Magic xxx

Magic, I felt this so much

Permalink Submitted by Kahdai on Thu, 2010-03-25 14:52

Magic, I felt this so much it hurt, but those huge inner explosions are marvellous sometimes aren't they? K xxxx

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Thanks Kahdai! Indeed, I

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Thu, 2010-03-25 15:10

Thanks Kahdai! Indeed, I think that's what keeps me going is the good feelings that can come from someone as well as the bad ones ;) Magic xxx

Keeps you going yes, :) the

Permalink Submitted by Kahdai on Thu, 2010-03-25 15:17

Keeps you going yes, :) the emotions that are too huge to fit inside are the only ones worth worrying about :) xxx

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

This is beautiful , Magic x

Permalink Submitted by Firebird on Fri, 2010-03-26 17:01

This is beautiful , Magic x You are such a talented poet x It is always a pleasure to read x:)

Aww thank you Firebird! I'm

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Fri, 2010-03-26 17:23

Aww thank you Firebird! I'm so happy my poetry means something to you and thank you for your loyal reading and commenting ;) Magic xxx

Sorry I am so late Magic!

Permalink Submitted by Beeme on Sat, 2010-03-27 10:43

Sorry I am so late Magic! This has many beautiful images I particularly like the flashing light at the end. I love how direct this is, it makes it very emotive and truthful for the reader. "This is my gift: death. Decay. Because of you I'm wasting away, inside out. It hurts like hell - but isn't this pain glorious? Addictive?" I can relate..;) Thank you Beeme XX

You don't need to thank me

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Sat, 2010-03-27 10:49

You don't need to thank me Beeme! ;) Though I'll admit I did think you would like this one so I'm very happy you can relate! Thank you for the wonderful comment! Magic xxx

you've, as usual, crafted

Permalink Submitted by Curse of 222 on Sat, 2010-03-27 12:56

you've, as usual, crafted some fantastic and emotive images, and this is a very effective piece. however, everything you've described is before the actual supernova, but the first line states that you all ready are such. perhaps keep the title, but change the first line? just a thought... :) jason

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Hey Jason! Glad you like

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Sat, 2010-03-27 13:47

Hey Jason! Glad you like this one :) About the first line ... I can plead ignorance in the fact that I am in no way 'sciencey' but I kinda already figured that I'd need to use some poetic license when it came to astro-physics, so maybe for now I'll claim 'poetic-license' ;) Magic xxx

I forgot to say earlier,

Permalink Submitted by Beeme on Sat, 2010-03-27 14:37

I forgot to say earlier, although I'm sure its only a matter of time before this gets cherry picked, you get a cherry from me :-) Beeme xx

Cheers Beeme! What sweeter

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Sat, 2010-03-27 14:39

Cheers Beeme! What sweeter cherry is there than one from a reader? ;) Although, not to curse it or anything - 'Supernova' is part of a poetic trilogy which consists of 'Remainders', 'Untouchable' and 'Supernova' - and the other two never got picked! Just wonder if there's a trend? ;) Magic xxx