We Rowed
By MistakenMagic
Mon, 16 Mar 2009
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Never the proud, protective lover; I was too fragile to break.
We rowed, so I clawed at your face like a rake,
slicing you to smooth and smother my ache.
Those plates you brought from Australia - bright aboriginal styles;
we rowed, so I splashed them into the kitchen tiles.
The amber shards were a chain of amber isles.
I found her letters, her smiles.Yes, the ones dripping with‘Je t’adore’.
We rowed, so I stamped you - her shadow, out the door;
discarded you. Your face, like a dropped oar.
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An interesting poem, Magic.
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
An interesting poem, Magic. You have some nice word play here. 'Row and 'row'. Clever:-)
You also have some good internal rhyming, as well as the main rhyming scheme.
"The amber shards were a chain of amber isles." A beautiful line.
It is good to experiment and I think this poem was worth all the hard work. Well done:-)
Tina xxx
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I agree with all the above;
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
I agree with all the above; different, clever and enjoyable. It provokes thought; that is worth the effort!
Chris XX
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this is the third poem of
Permalink Submitted by Curse of 222 on
this is the third poem of yours that i've read, and i've noticed that each one has a comment saying how it's different than your normal style...and i'm starting to wonder if your style is just your style...
no matter the style, i've enjoyed reading them all.
"I found her letters, her smiles." i particularly like this...it's simple and very effective.
jason
jason
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