Life is a puzzle

By monodemo

Fri, 12 Aug 2022
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What is life to me?

A puzzle with hundreds of

Pieces? Im so confused!

Life has just thown

A ceramic bowl from

Above that smashed

Into smithereens.

I have the glue to fix it

But none of the smaller

Fragments seem to want to conform

To the puzzle called life!

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2022
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Comments

Submitted by Penny4athought on

Well structured, introspective poem and relatable matter. The puzzlement of life stumps us all; it can be fragmented, impossible, at times, to piece together its meaning. I did have one suggestion for the ending; I'm not sure you need the last line as the line before, “But none of the smaller Fragments seem to want to conform” can end it. The ‘puzzle of life’ was established as the subject in the first line, so the flow is already there- but that’s just my thought, that it flows better without it. Either way, it’s a well constructed, poetic, observation that I enjoyed reading.smiley

Penny4athought

Submitted by monodemo on

why thank you penny,

im new to poetry, more used to writing stories. im glad of each and every suggestion to help make myself better. i loved your feedback and appreciate the time it took you to write it

thanks

mono

Submitted by Tom Brown on

I think the hardest would be a blank white jigsaw puzzle, my mother was good at jigsaw puzzles it takes terrific patience. Myself, I like to think of myself as unofficial world champion of Rubick's Cube although I don't come near the 4.52 seconds. You also get those Chinese puzzles kinds of tricks is more like it.

Best of luck! Tom