IF I WERE

Gold cherry
Poem of the week

By moonphish

Thu, 04 Sep 2014
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15 comments
 

 

 
if i were mute, with language lost
i would not vegetate
i'd let my heart rise up in song
and quickly escalate
.
but i'm not mute, no language lost
i may not fascinate
but when i feel the urge to speak
my words resuscitate
.
if i were blind, with vision lost
i still could replicate
old memories of sunsets, grand
which i would recreate
.
but i'm not blind, no vision lost
no need to renovate
i merely need to raise my lids
to re-investigate
.
if i were deaf, with music lost
i would not hesitate
the vein of music in my soul
i'd quickly excavate
.
but i'm not deaf, no music lost
my ears reverberate
with sprawling scrolls of rhapsodies
that i'll perpetuate
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Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

We have the art of speech...hearing and sight,  you make me realise what a special gift we all  have, within this poem and how lucky we should count ourselves. 

Yet another gifted poem Alvin.

Much enjoyed.

Jenny.  smiley

 

Submitted by moonphish on

thanks Jenny...i alwats appreciate your time and kind words

Submitted by moonphish on

thank you editors for your "poem of the week" designation...i am honoured and surprised

Submitted by Geoff Smith on

I do really like the stucture and the rhythm here.

Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.

Submitted by moonphish on

thanks so much Jasper

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I'd meant to read this before, but now I'm glad I've been reminded! Verse 5 made me think of Beethoven going deaf, and presumably having to rely on his vivid stored music. It must be different for those born sensually impaired, but maybe they can use their brain in someway to create something special that matches the other senses they do have. As so often, cleverly crafted, thought-out, and challenging. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by moonphish on

so very glad you enjoyed , Rhiannon...thank you !

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Beautiful, Moonphish.  And so true.  A wonderful weaving of sensory pleasure.

Agreed, Rhiannon.

Don't switch me off.

 

Parson Thru

Submitted by moonphish on

thanks Parson...glad you dug it

Submitted by jolono on

Great poem Alvin. Well deserved POTW.

 

Submitted by moonphish on

thanks jolono...i was surprised at being picked

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

There's such a sense of joy in this poem, music spills out of it, a celebration of existence.

Submitted by moonphish on

thanks so much Philip, what kind words

Submitted by catherine poarch on

Congratulations, well-deserved. I like the use and re-use of the 'ate' rhyme. I like the bit about just having to raise your lids to see. And what a great word rhapsody is.

 

Submitted by moonphish on

thanks so much Catherine, i appreciate your time and kind comments