Fissure
By Parson Thru
Fri, 03 Feb 2017
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Walking past the crisp-shop on MB
Young bloke serving, framed in the door, looked up
It caught my breath
Absolute spit of David
I thought he briefly smiled
I probably stared, then looked away, embarrassed
Strange, after 25 years, it can still do that
Would he even know me now?
Thinning hair, beard, grey?
In the morning, just to be sure, I looked in again
Young bloke was serving still
But David had gone
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This is so attractive for its
This is so attractive for its plain speaking and also, each line is exceptionally tight despite that colloquial tone.
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The one that got away?
Permalink Submitted by Rachel Down on
Beautiful resonance! And I can hear your voice, and perhaps longing? I still see Michael and look again to realise it isn't him.
Love it!
RD
Rachel Down
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