In the park (IP)

By Parson Thru

Sun, 01 Jul 2018
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Stretched on a bench in Retiro Park
Soaking up sun and swatting flies
Trying hard to find the mark
Thinking how the land lies
Birds sing in the trees
Seems like heaven
Sunburned knees
Seven
Tea

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Submitted by luigi_pagano on

A good one, Kevin, and rhyming too.

Best, Luigi

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Cheers Luigi!

Parson Thru

Submitted by Di_Hard on

That flows very well, you have made it seem  completely natural. What is the seven tea?

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Thanks Di_Hard. Don't let me hold your imagination back! :)

Seven o'clock. Time for tea. Maybe.

Or in the finest tradition of dodgy rhymes: a two syllable word rhyming with heaven and an inoccuous single syllable word that's shorter in length than seven. ;)

Parson Thru

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Ahhhh

my imagination had suggested there were seven knees :0)

imagination not  my strong point

 

have just got the sum wrong. Maths also not a strong point

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Snap!

I quite like the seven knees idea.

I often get that wrong. If I ever vanish, that might be why.

Parson Thru