Spontaneous garbage
By Parson Thru
Sun, 01 Jul 2012
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16 comments
There he lies -
snores like a bastard
It won't be long
before one of us dies
And it won't be me
I'm not the one
who's soundly asleep
lying there catching flies
No chance.
Even they won't go near him
with his God-awful racket
and beer-soaked breath
The only thing
that I owe him now
is a clean and
fairly swift death
No jury on earth
would blame me
for driving a bread-knife
into the eye
of the noisy old shit
it's been my misfortune
to lie with
for all of these years.
Die, you bastard.
Die! Die! Die!
Oh Lord.
What have I done?
You know what a life
I've had with this man.
Ask the jury
to cut me some slack
I bet they never expected
to see me back.
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Comments
Really enjoyed the dark
Permalink Submitted by well-wisher on
Really enjoyed the dark humour in this. Not sure why you called it "Spontaneous Garbage", mind you, I often feel that way about alot of my stuff but, personally, I thought this was very entertaining.
I particularly liked:
'No chance. Even they won't
go near him
with his God-awful racket
and beer-soaked breath'
Made me think of Edgar Allen Poe's "The Tell-Tale Heart".
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Love this one, PT...and
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Love this one, PT...and Blake does spring to mind;-)
Tina
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Hi PT, no idea who Blake is,
Hi PT, no idea who Blake is, just know that this made me smile with it's dark humour!
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William Blakes "A Poison
William Blakes "A Poison Tree" I was put in mind of with the level of feeling expressed.
Sorry for being overly laconic - not one of my usual faults!
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I like this too, PT. And as
I like this too, PT. And as a career snorer and being the bane of my wife's sleepless nights, I sometimes worry that she'll sooner or later smother me with a pillow. Really loved the black humour in your piece.
Trev
TVR
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Really entertaining PT, as
Permalink Submitted by ItsSteveDave on
Really entertaining PT, as the others have said, the dark humour is great here. A really well carried off poem.
Oh, and sleep is definitely worth killing for ;)
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And change the title to
Permalink Submitted by ItsSteveDave on
And change the title to something that does this excellent poem justice!! :)
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Titles are the bane of my
Permalink Submitted by ItsSteveDave on
Titles are the bane of my life PT! When I'm stuck I usually just pick a line from the poem, but often that doesn't say what I want it to say! Maybe something along the theme of paring? Double meaning potential...
Yeah, titles are definitly hard!
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Your story has inspired my
Permalink Submitted by well-wisher on
Your story has inspired my latest story, Parson.
It's called "The Infernal Snore".
I hope you don't mind. The situation is the same but the conclusion is different.
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