Ponderings

By Peridot

Sat, 12 Mar 2016
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complications can be resolved
questions bear witness to answers
ideas contain power to be manifested
emotions can be commaned and directed

some flowers bloom and die daily
some anger over the minds maybes
precious possessions are hidden and vaulted
love is endless descriptions ever evolving

prescence commanded is noticed
attention desired is sought
communication is a skill for understanding
integrity explains character flaw

Certificate PG
Poem
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Comments

Submitted by london_calling79 on

I like the sense of escalation - does give it some punch. Needs a bit of proofing (commanded in the first stanza and in the last?) Maybe the extension of the third line in every stanza could be repeated. Ignore if I'm rambling! Enjoyed this.

 

Submitted by Peridot on

i havent reread it yet. just zoning through frustration.