Visions

By peterelbee

Fri, 17 Sep 2010
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Visions of a commune, ocker hippie lingo

Images of Uluru, transgression of a dingo

Shrouded diamond cosmos, half a cheesy-moon

Incense and a guitar, lighter burns a spoon

Outback canine bogeyman, trotting in the dark

Nabbed a little bubba, without a yelp or bark

Hysteria for Azaria and a dingo on the prowl.

Certificate U
Poem
pete de poet
Historical Fiction

Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi peterelbee, I like this, because it's so casual, like writing down visions that come into your head. It's how all the best poems start. I love the first line, really cool man! Jenny.

 

Submitted by shoe on
Kind of quirky, I like it.

 

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Me too. 'Shrouded diamond cosmos, half a cheesy-moon' Love this :)

Submitted by Highhat on
Are you referring to the little baby that disappeared in the outback in Australia? Nice little poem! pia ;)

Submitted by peterelbee on
I wrote this poem some time back, took a long time to perfect it, despite the fact that it is so brief. Still not completely happy with the final line, would be greatful for any feedback as to how to improve it. Yes Highhat the poem is about the baby that went missing from ayres rock back on 17 August 1980.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
. . . 'a mystical red rock and Alice Springs ' it doesn't matter that you write the formal place name. Mystical because there was such an aura of it about the baby's disappearance.Just a silly suggestion. The rock really is a fantastic place. I wish I hadn't only flewn over it. It would be nice to visit and climb up to the top and see all the aboriginal wall paintings. love your little poem. I used to live in Australia-as a child. Love the country dearly. ;) pia