Slowly Floating In the Wind

By prettyrose

Wed, 16 Mar 2011
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12 comments
 

When I heard the words.
Time Brutally stood still,
No time to plan or take a break,
It felt like I had passed my sell by date.

Then came the tears,after the screams,
Closely followed by why me! Why should I have
To go through this ordeal.

I feel like an Eagle, once
Strong, now wounded waiting to fall,
But still trying to conquer all.

Even though my carriage awaits,
To take me through those heavenly Gates.
I wont go quietly and give in,
But fight this enemy from within.

Certificate PG
Poem
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Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Prettyrose, this is so beautifully written, it made me think of my dad who died of cancer in 2004, it was the kind of words he would have used, especially the last stanza:- Even though my carriage awaits, To take me through those heavenly Gates. I wont go quietly and give in, But fight this enemy from within. Yes real fighting words. Thanks for the read. Jenny.

 

Submitted by prettyrose on
Hi Jenny, hope your ok and I am sorry to have woken any pain for you, I was trying to give inspiration, I wrote it with cancer in mind after i had a cancer scare couple years ago and i know some one in their 30's whos just been told she has breast cancer. But it can, i hope help many people with all kinds health issues. Thank you for your kind words, means alot from some one so talented as yourself. Take care And Keep Smiling :))

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Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi prettyrose, please don't be sorry, I think your poem was very insperational and I'm glad I left a comment on here now, because I'm sure it will give people a lot of hope. You certainly didn't wake up any pain for me, my dad has been at rest along time now, I'm sure he is in a much better place. Cancer seems to be something we are afraid to talk about, even now because it's so final, but I hope that in the future the scientist will discover more cures, so that less people have to suffer. I hope that your cancer scare is well and truely gone now and that your friend will be okay. Thankyou for leaving your message. Jenny.

 

Submitted by prettyrose on
Hi Jenny :) Thank you for saying that as I know from losing my own dad to ill health that sometimes the pain rears its bitter head when you least expect it. I hope this poem does help and that any more I do (which I have got lined up) also do. Your right we are afraid to mention Cancer, Now more so after figures show an increase but its probably just to painful for people to talk about it because on average at least 1 of us knows some one who have died or suffering with it, or a friend of a friend as it. But Like dementia I think it will take a few more years before we are all comfortable in our own skin to not only talk about it but face it straight on. Yes Thank you so far we are both ok. :) Takc Care And Keep Smiling. T x

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Submitted by Wolfsax on
Hi there Prettyrose, The emotion i this piece is what gives it power and makes it a compelling read. It draws the reader in to empathise with the narrator and share the experience in all its terror. this it does very well. I would make a very minor comment which you are free to ignore if you disagree, but in the last line of the first stanza you have It felt like I had past by sell by date. I think that there are a couple of typos here, so that I think it should read It felt like I had passed my sell by date. Many thanks for a moving poem. all best wishes Dave

Aim for the stars then if you fail you might still land on the moon, and that's not a bad second best.

Submitted by prettyrose on
Hi Dave a.k.a Claireslover :) Thank you for taking the time to write and pointing out something so obviously missed by me, but that serves me right for trying to submit poems/stories early hours of the morning or when I am not so awake lol. I have corrected it. Thank you again for all of the comment. take care and keep smiling.

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Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Prettyrose Love the title. Wonderful poem, I can identify with all of this,some can, as indeed got carried away posting the other day.Can't delete said too much. Been there for all. By there sides and mum nursing home, not cancer. Big family happenings. Quite a few Cancer and died. My dad late fifties then life. So call myself agony aunt. Hope your well. Take care. julie xx

Submitted by prettyrose on
Hi Cavalcaderl :) Thank you for lovely coment and yes the title just seemed perfect soon as it came to me. Well it seems family and friends are lucky to have you and I know what you mean regarding nursing home, I too watched a relative suffer slowly in 1 of those places e.t.c. Thank you again and Im not to bad and I appreciate you asking and I hope your ok too :)))) Take care and Keep Smiling :))))))))

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Submitted by celticman on
a powerful piece. Well done.

 

Submitted by prettyrose on
Hi Celticman :) Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. Also for the comment it means alot :)))) Take care and Keep Smiling :)))))

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Submitted by palvi sharma on
Hi Prettyrose Really loved your poem. A truly motivational piece. Keep it up :)

Submitted by prettyrose on
Hi Palvi Sharma, Thank you for taking the time to read it and for your lovely comments, they mean alot:) take care and keep smiling :)))))

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