Blue Mood Mall

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Sat, 22 Aug 2015
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9 comments
 

Swamping,  dazzling,
echoing chatter and
footsteps batter,
muzak thumping,
people thrusting, bumping,
alluring displays
(plastic pays),
austerity forget
– take ‘temporary’ debt!
‘You deserve a lift!’
– a gift? shop-lift?
fashion unrationed;
no charity shops
or cheap outlets,
to browse and spy
surprise wise buys –
out of one shop into another –
bustling corridor,
no interlude with sky up high,
and cool fresh air a soother:

a foray in the fray,
mind geared up to find
shoes of certain size and fit
display arrays confuse,
refuse to stray
from clear objective,
sensibly selective,
then quit, and flit
to the quiet,
unwind from the stress –
no brawl or riot,
but an alien racket and press.

 

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Comments

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Oh my gosh I can feel myself there in amongst the fray of the chaotic free for all. You have described this so well!

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, AE. I felt an exile from the quieter country! I think I need quieter shopping roads. Glad you felt it worked to convey the atmosphere to me. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

I felt that panic I get in this situation. This would be a great one to read aloud at a reading, Rhiannon. Well worded and such a sharp contrast to your lovely nature walks I so enjoy. But I did enjoy this too. Excellently conveyed. 

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Bee. Yes, I enjoy my nature walks much more, but even for shopping, I think I do better in ordinary shopping high streeets. Your nights still disturbed? warm greetings, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

thanks for the cherry! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Hello there, Rhiannon, and I would like to say I enjoyed our little shopping trip, together, just as much as when you take me on a nature ramble, but sadly, I didn'tsmiley  How well you manage to convey how I feel in these large shopping centres these days.  Probably why I do most of my shopping in our little market town, or on-line, of course.

Brilliant poem, and well done on those cherries.

Tina

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

thanks for that, Tina, and I hope you are well recovered from the visit now, too! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

I would guess that you aren't a big fan of these huge malls, and I would agree with you about that. In never occurred to me before that they don't ever have charity shops in them. But you are right.

Jean

 

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

thanks, Jean.  I am really very inexperienced at visiting them, and I think it will remain so! Rhiannon