on the cliff path

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Wed, 03 Dec 2014
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15 comments
 

We’re high above the sea;
– it stretches far away:
the heaving, briny plain
that’s edged by frothy spray.

The mist has cleared, the clouds
thin out, reveal a glow
which casts a silver path
across the surge and flow.

One boat in all that desert;
we see a cormorant dive
– so out of sight there teems
an ocean world alive.

 

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Poem
Coastal Path
Nature

Comments

Submitted by Bee on

No wasted words in this, Rhiannon, and yet such an atmosphere achieved.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Bee – it was that atmosphere I wanted to convey, and brevity seemed to help, with all that vastness seemingly empty. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

It's beautiful, Rhiannon.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you very much for letting me know you think so, Vera. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Lovely insight.  I like the sense that there is so much more there than we can see.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Helen, that was part of what I hoped to convey. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

What a beautiful poem. The picture comes alive with reading about it.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

that's a lovely comment, appreciated. Thanks, Jean. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

And thanks for the cherries! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Shannan on

... rhythm and rhyming and flow.

Enjoyed the images you created, especially the moon's silver path :-)

thanks for sharing, congrats on the cherries $

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Shannan, glad you enjoyed it. Nice to hear from you, hope you are bearing up.
Actually it was the sun shining through the thinning clouds that made a silver path rather than a golden path! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Shannan on

I actually experienced such sunlight silver myself, off the coast of Portugal :-) thanks so much for remembering, I have made some drastic changes for 2015, so praying the leaps of faith will lift me up again ... we shall see what God needs from me however it turns out. Compliments of this blessed season to you :-) $

 

Submitted by Shannan on

Blessings to you

 

Submitted by forest_for_ever on

'the heaving, briny plain...' exquisite imagery Rhiannon.  Just the sort of poem to start the working week with.  Writers such as yourself and Biggus are an inspiration to all of us.  I feel as if you were my eyes in this poem and like all good poems gives each time it is read.

Thank you

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you so much for letting me know, Forest. Lovely to hear your comment about seeing the scene yourself through the words. Rhiannon