Dream with the breeze

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Mon, 08 Jun 2020
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8 comments
 

Evening sunlight,
escape and rise,
town below;

growing corn – breeze
waves the barley
– swells ripple across the field,
on further up to look west,
then down past rising wheat,
home.

Certificate U
Poem
Countryside explorations
Nature
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

very sensory - I can smell the air and feel the breeze on my skin in just a few short lines. Excellent.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, I achieved what I wanted then! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Cherries appreciated, thanks. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Beautiful Rhiannon. Your poems are always so visual and full of texture, I can see those crops swaying, 'swells rippling' and aren't they so early this year. Walking around it feels as if we are a month ahead or more. 

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jane. Yes, a lot of things are ahead aren't they, though this cold weather might slow things a bit?

I hadn't been able to get out for a while, health-wise, and it was a real delight, and to see how the prepared earth of a while ago, and the poking through spears we'd seen last time, were now so tall. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

This is gorgeous! I don't know how you make a few lines so full of space and light and freshness! I love "escape and rise" and "swells ripple", and the cosiness of "home" at the end, like a welcoming door. And you caught some beautiful wind in your photo :0)

I am sorry to hear you had not been able to go out because you were ill and hope everything is good with you now

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Di. I hadn't realised the wind's effect came out in that little photo!

Still struggling somewhat, but I think things improving. So good to have some lovely nature nearby when can get out briefly, but maybe longer walks again soon,! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

I hope you are better soon, and able to go walking again. Take care of yourself