The exact time for dozing!

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Wed, 22 Dec 2021
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[This is a freshened up old one]

The clock was slightly slow.
No longer would it go
the speed to keep its face correct,
the mechanism worn,
its cogs catch as they turn,
inaccurate each time he checked.

The owner loved time absolute.
He bought a clock that could compute,
and kept in touch by radio wave
with clock atomic – which should shave
a millisecond here and there,
and he would know exactly where
he was within each hour..

So happy then to go his way,
and wander vaguely through his day,
surprised at how the hours fly,
as dozing, reading, time drifts by.
[IP: clocks]

 

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Comments

Submitted by onemorething on

Very nice, a comforting poem. :)

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks. Yes, it is really, isn't it? Though the humour of his wanting to know the time so prescisely despite dozing mostly, yet it is nice to think of the elderly sleeping happily! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by marandina on

Nicely done, Rhiannon. [And thank you for the thoughtful comment on my graveyard poem. I took it down to re-write as it felt too maudlin.]

Wishing you and your family a Merry Christmas. Paul :)

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Paul, and for explaining. I wondered if you might want to work further on it. Must look out for any second draft! I hope you have a happy time too, and peaceful. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Very clever poem Rhiannon. I read it out loud and it really works well. ( Pardon the pun. wink )

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

laugh unlike the old clock! Thank you for your comment. Rhiannon, and if I haven't said so, I hope you have a happy time over the holiday and on.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for the cherries! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

I love the title :0) The contrast between "time absolute" with "wander vaguely through his day" . Also  "shave/a millisecond here and there,"  "millisecond "and the imprecision of "here and there" is brilliant. It's a lovely gentle, affectionate poem. Reading it the lines seemed to take as long each one as the tick of a grandfather clock :0)

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Lovely thoughtful comment again, Di. Thank you. Glad you felt it gentle and affectionate. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Turlough on

I enjoyed reading this Rhiannon.

I really like the rhyme and rhythm as they continue throughout ... like clockwork.

Turlough

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you! I did tighten up the rhythm and rhyme a bit before reposting. It is based on real memories of someone. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by airyfairy on

I so identify with those last lines! This is a lovely one to read aloud, Rhiannon, a wonderful rhythm.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you,. I'm glad I tightened up on one rather 'bumpy' longer line now!

I hope your daughter and son are better, and able to be with you over the holiday. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Yes indeed, and obviously one has to take General Relativity – time dilation – mass, gravity, acceleration and relative velocities into consideration too – I mean at that kind of precision. Poor guy.

And again, have a lovely Christmas Rhiannon, hope you have a big family do, nothing here since long ago ... just a quiet day with the family i.e my brother.

Tom

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for the greetings, Tom. No, our family are away, but we hope to see some next week, and the family that live with us returning here. but this weekend should be quiet, we hope to have a friend who lives on his own now since his wife died, to join us for lunch. It can be a good day however quiet, and I hope yours will be. The Lord is good, and his incarnation for our salvation so wonderful, and his present help and presence (the best 'present'!) Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

The Big Family yes! Always, and all the ABC friends you will never know how much you mean to me.

Season's Greetings and I wish you Joy! Tom Brown