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Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Mon, 23 Aug 2021
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Snowflakes preoccupied stay cold,
bulldozers barge, uncaringly bold
but treasures. worth their weight in gold,
in service kind, are quietly enrolled.

[IP: using Semiotics – have I got it right? word images are more difficult to think of than visual]

 

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Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Weren't there cherries meant to arrive? the email said so! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you!! Sorry for the confusion. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by marandina on

Succinct and precise. You do these short pieces so well. Paul :)

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Paul. It was interesting to think about the idea of the IP. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

great contrast of snowflake an bulldozer, and enrolled is such a clever word as tying with bulldozer. I think of your mind as this HUGE  cupboard with shelves and shelves and you always find the exact right jar for your poem's recipe  as soon as you open the door :0)

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Ha! but no, it was just realising something of how I think the word snowflake is now used I think , and coming across that 'bulldozer' is an accepted word … I hope it ended up with clear meaning. We do want to be caring, but not insensitively! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

Well worth the cherries. You can say a lot in a few lines.

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

True. Thank you, Jean. Rhiannon