Firewall – Dental Portcullis!

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 08 Nov 2024
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Good fire (bonfire*?)
cooking fire, warming fire,
controlled fire
illuminating night
signal beacon fire
seen from afar.

Wild fire
consuming fire
dangerous
uncontrolled, unleashed,
spreading fast
making waste.

Tongues, on leash, controlled,
do good,
Tongues unleashed ignite
blow sparks of spite
sneakily snake out, seeding
fresh blazes far away wandering, slandering:
can’t be recalled –
wildfire – need a firewall:
close the portcullis – dental gate!

[IP: bonfire. *Samel Johnson thought the ‘bon’  came from ‘bon/good’, but it actially seems to have come from ‘bones’. but I felt it could still stand for useful, controlled fire here!]

 

Certificate U
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Miscellaneous
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Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

A very interesting and creative take on the inspiration point, Rhiannon and very fitting with the age we are living in where words literally spread like wildfire in seconds, perhaps in a more dangerous way than ever before.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

thank you, Jane. Also of course, so much opportunity to spread by writing, and again, can't be fully recalled if regretted. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for the cherries. Rh

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

love all your word sounds - that last part specially, and the rhythm you create it is like billowing flames suddenly darting out as the wind changes. The poem gets more energy as it progresses, evoking the fear of uncontrolled fire, and then the hard sound of the T in gate, shutting it all off

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Di. As ever it is good to hear your analysis of the effects of sound.. We share pleasurein use of the sound of words and rhythm. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

This is such a clever poem Rhiannon. How you've managed to capture the I P in such an original way is something I would  never have thought of.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny. I hope you are reasonably comfortable. I do remember years ago reading a little article somewhere speaking of the teeth and the soft lips both being available to guard the tongue and  keep it in its place, but we do need the Lord's prompting and help!

Rhiannon

 

Submitted by a102866 on

How true the last stanza rings home. A little leaven leaveneth the whole lump. Thanks for your thoughtful verse. You are now the ABC Fire Marshal!

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

thanks. What a task that would be to have to, or be allowed to assess well and truly all that is on here! Rhiannon