Ins and outs of politics

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 21 Jan 2022
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Flawed voters want flawless leaders
faultless, biddable
no apologies acceptable;
our voting makes you disposable,
expendable, riddable –
you are rejected –
a new hero will be projected –
oh how pleasant
absolutely true and decent,
all ancient misdemeanours
undiscoverable,
friendly, bendable.

Might a candidate duplicious
more seriously deceive us
win us, charm us, soon to harm us –
blindly led where our misused voice
no longer has the choice to act, impact –
peace by restraint, no complaint
allowed,
democracy abused befouled
bled dead.

[IP:  Exits and Entrances ]

 

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Comments

Submitted by Di_Hard on

That's a really good point Rhiannon! And I love your rhythm and rhymes too . It's like a magic trick , while I would shuffle hopefully, you seem always to have your finger on exactly the right word! Over and Over again. Awestruck

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Di. It is satisfying if some rhymes come helpfully and 'musically'. But this faltered a lot this week, both in trying to get the sense clear, and the format, and was abandoned a few times! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

The second half, particularly, "blindly led" with bled dead" is inspired, "misused" with "abused", "voice" with choice" not at line ending? We tried watching Hamilton the other day, and everything I liked about that, you have ten million times more. The second part, it's just amazing, the sounds? And 

"democracy abused befouled
bled dead."

is very powerful

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks for that analysis, and your appreciation. I don't know much about 'Hamilton'. I guess there is a lot of 'rap-like' rhyming. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

I guess bards werethe rap stars of their time :0) I wish Lin-Manuel Miranda could read this poem :0)

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

smiley Thank you, again! Rh