The lesser light

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 26 Nov 2021
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12 comments
 

What a wonderful moon  we have:
silvery glow – we watch it grow
and shrink, rise and glide,
and slowly sink
calm for lovers
and travellers’ guide
in its regular nightly
mathematically governed
ride.

Who could devise
such a wonderful size
just right
– the ‘deputy’ of the night
to reflect sun’s light
and occasionally eclipse it
so we value the sight,
and its ‘pull’ just enough
to shake up the seas
like an ocean breeze
to constantly ebb and flow
tides high and low
daily thresh
sea life refresh.

Science can’t make sense
of how it’s as it is:
    no collision
    no explosion
    or condensation
    or attraction
    can explain
but
    benevolent creation
    can.

[IP: eclipse]

 

Certificate U
Poem
Grand Designs
Nature
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

What a great journey of the moon you took me on with this poem Rhiannon. I like how you touched on the importance of this wonderful glow in the night sky.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny. Glad you enjoyed it. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Yes the moon is lovely, in her ancient pale cold desolate beauty.

Indeed, there is no satisfactory scientific theory where she came from.

Keep well Rhiannon! Lovely poems! Tom

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Tom. Yes, as in many things science cannot cover ultimate origins as all had a beginning! And it does point to the One who can and did. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by marandina on

Beautiful phrasing and some wonderful lines. "The 'deputy'of the night to reflect sun's light..."Nicely done, Rhiannon. Paul

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Paul Glad you picked out that line! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Dear Rhiannon, a good contribution to the Inspiration Point except that in my opinion, the last stanza does not enhance the quality of the poem. If I may be blunt, it sounds as if you are preaching to the converted.

With friendship, Luigi.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks for your honesty, Luigi. I'm glad you liked the rest of the poem!

I'm glad if no-one does have a problem with realising the impossibility of the theories many sciientists want to promote for a naturalistic interpretation of the moon's origin. Yes, maybe it does lie a bit bumpily at the end of the verse, but it seemed good to acknowledge why all the good and useful and suitable things about our moon are sol Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

I love the rhyme and rhythm of this, both relaxing and playful as the sound of the sea's waves :

What a wonderful moon  we have:
silvery glow – we watch it grow
and shrink, rise and glide,
and slowly sink

and "daily thresh" is brilliant, both for the sound but also because of how the incoming sea rakes through the weed releasing all the hiding crabs etc

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Di, for your appreciation.

I hadn't realised until reading this week, how the tides were so important in refreshing and stirring the seawater of the oceans. Even with the pollution problems, it probably helps that there isn't much stagnation in one place. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Yes! I wonder if the waves help put oxygen into the water like when kneading bread?

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Yes, I would think so! I have a new appreciation of why the world has been made with tides! Rhiannon