On the parable … (Luke 11:5–9)

By Rhiannonw

Sun, 16 Aug 2015
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Continuing the idea of one of my old hymns on Sundays:

If to a friend at midnight
you went to ask for bread –
‘Another friend has come to stay,
and I’ve no food,’ you said.

Although a friend, he would not
get out of bed, unless
he knew you had an urgent need –
for help he heard you press.

And will not God, the Father,
if he’s your Friend indeed,
be pleased to hear you earnestly
pray for the help you need?

Tune 76 86  ‘We love the wonderful stories’ (Scottish folk tune)      arr W H Hamilton.

“So I say to you: Ask and it will be given to you; seek and you will find; knock and the door will be opened to you. …" (Luke 11:9)

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Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Lovely Rhiannon. I like the structure and rhymes and enjoyed the selected scripture, something to think about for the day certainly.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, AE, hope you find it helpful. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Lovely Rhiannon. I like the structure and rhymes and enjoyed the selected scripture, something to think about for the day certainly.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

As above! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

I enjoyed reading this poem and the story you attached to it. I think this concept of asking God for something, and expecting it to happen, is quite a hard one for people of little or no faith. Because the stock answer if you don't get what you want, is that God decided that it isn't the right time or the right thing for you. Or God answers our prayers in his own good time. I have had experiences where I have prayed hard for something big to happen, and it has happened, but who knows whether it would have happened if I hadn't prayed.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks for your honest comment, Jean. Faith is believing what God says,  and prayer is talking to him as knowing he exists and is both powerful and kind, but therefore has to be combined with contrition and humility, and knowing he does know what is best ultimately, but truly and earnestly praying about our problems. If they are in the light of faith then we know that our spiritual good, and being enabled to live more for his glory are the most important things, and will affect our sense of need as for serving him. I don't know if you think that answers/helps at all? warm regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by maisie on

with hymns its best to put in the structure underneath so that the music matches each verse.

That means that coumted syllables work best.

Each first line has to have a count of 8 (as you have 8 in your first line) and so on through out the hymn.

You seem to have lines which are short on syllables -  the second line reads

sl 1 - 8 syllables then sl 2 - 6 syllables, sl 3 - 8 syllables. all dependent on where you stress the word. 

etc, etc...   hymns are great fun, hope you carry on with this one. 

maisie angel Guess what?  I'm still alive!

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

thanks for reading and commenting, Maisie.
I'm a bit puzzled, as I have put the structure underneath in this one as being 76 86, which admittedly is a slightly odd structure, but as far as I can see I have stuck to that syllable count throughout, and it does fit the music I think. I have sung it to it for many years anyway, though as I am away from  home at present I can't check the music out.
76 86 means that the tune can fit 7 syllables in the first line, 6 in the second, 8 in the third, 6 in the fourth. CM (common meter) for hymn tunes has 86 86.

Don't know if that makes sense to you! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by maisie on

you make sense, did you count up the syllables in the old hymn tune?    I'd grab that like a treasure map.

the last hymn I did, the organist made the turn up for.  It was so much fun.  I had to finally repolish as she did the tune... :) great fun.. did it sing well to the music?

maisie angel Guess what?  I'm still alive!

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Hi, Maisie, thanks for your interest again, and good to hear of your hymn wiriting work. Old hymn tunes are usually marked as number of syllables per line eg 86 86 or 10 10 10 10 though there are some symbols used eg CM, SM, LMD, which if you don't know what they stand for you have to work it out from the words that go to them. And also you have to check the stress pattern. I used to know the names for the unusual stress patterns also, but from the music or words that have been sung to them you can work it out. This little song did sing fine to the tune, and I had checked the words that had previously been sung to it I think. As i said I'm not at home to check back on the tune. There have been times I've gone back to a tune and found I had without realising it been modifying the original version!

warm regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Hi Rhiannon

Irrespective of how structured, the message and verse delivered really well. Nice one, I thought. smiley

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, very much A-o-D, glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for telling me! Rhiannon