River in Spate

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 12 Feb 2021
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11 comments
 

Downpour falling
river filling
spilling
tumbling
further onward, forward, downward
rumbling
rushing, crashing, splashing, pushing
urgent motion
moving, shoving
churning
fast returning
to the basin
of the ocean
vast
at last.

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Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Rivers can be so calm and peaceful, yet also a torrent causing havoc, which you describe very well in this poem Rhiannon.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you. Yes, and the sound is lovely isn't it? Sometimes the rushing, full river isn't causing havoc, but is still awesome in power like crashing waves. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

this is so exciting! I loved it - would never have thought of shoving, but it's perfect, giving the idea of eagerness. And I love the peace of the 2 wide, flat A sounds at the end - vast made me think of the sky and last the sea wrapping round the earth. It's sort of like a sigh. I keep reading it all over and over :0)

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Di. So glad you liked it like that. I thought of you and your appreciation of sounds, as I too, felt the end line came as a sigh of arrival and (relative) calmness. No rushing down any more anyway! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for the cherries token! Rhainnon

 

Submitted by Nolan on

brilliant &

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Oh, thank you! I'm so glad you liked it! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Lovely, watery poem, I enjoyed the free flowing arrangement of the river's description. It's so alive and very much an apt theme, given all the bursting banks and frozen, flooded fields I observe on my drive to work.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jane. I can't get out really at present, but I was inspired when watching on catch-up the river in Scotland on Winterwatch, and looking up some ofd photos of a holiday in Scotland. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by marandina on

Nicely done. Always good to see different formats working.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks. I tried to get the feel of the river flow. Rhiannon