Jasper in the Sun

By Richard L. Provencher

Thu, 05 May 2011
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Trees petition Nature in artful display dressed among strokes of landscape green, cliffs presented in sheaths of gray, afternoon clouds crowding a skylight blue, stream’s surface reflecting diamond-glints aside the highway and Rocky Mountains ebb and flow like a tidal wave of mist surrounding an asphalt path, words unable to escape, the awe of verbiage caught in our throats, heralded by the strut of bighorn sheep; our holiday a feast, as tourists we inhale sights and sounds, cameras recording.

© Richard L. Provencher
Website; www.wsprog.com/rp/

Published April 2011 by Paragon 1V Journal
Department of English, Memorial University
St. John’s, Newfoundland
ISBN: 978-0-88901-430-5

Certificate U
POETRY - A Passage of Motion 2
Travel

Comments

Submitted by mikepyro on
Reads more like a passage of thick prose than a poem. I Think the structure is a bit odd as it doesn't flow verywell, rather it feels bunched together. This is easily fixed; what I loved was the vivid descriptions and sense of place embedded throughout.Zit tells a message without being preachy or sappy about the touchy subject. Well done!

Give me the beat boys and free my soul! I wanna getta lost in ya rock n' roll and drift away. Drift away...

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Richard L. Prov... A beautiful, vibrant description, full of artistic words. I love this piece. Jenny.

 

Submitted by jennifer on
Fab imagery, really took me there! However, I am afraid I agree with 'mikepyro' about the structure, J x