Older Men Talking

Cherry

By Richard L. Provencher

Thu, 23 May 2019
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like young boys again

gathered ‘round a TV set

in the nursing home

sharing glory-stories

of way back when...

 

fishing gab was number one

and a fishing hole

no one dared tell about—

spit in a handshake always

sealed the pledge.

 

Our hot stove conversation

grew us up through  

stories about our teen-age years

and freckle-faced girls

followed by careers then

wedding-vows...

 

but these days we easily tire as

nurse comes round with nightly cocoa,

at this late hour we all together chime...

Oh Oh - bedtime.

 

(c) 2019 Richard L. Provencher & Jennifer Skinner 

 

 

Certificate PG
Poem
Words that Matter
Humour

Comments

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on

 

Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Richard, I don't know if this helps.

 

but these days we easily tire as

nurse comes round with nightly cocoa,

at this late hour we all together chime...

Oh Oh - bedtime.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on

Just perfect, Jenny. I used every piece of  your furniture of words. Any changes you wish to make? Yes, indeed. You caught the momentum. THANKS. More people should try something like this exercise with their own writing. RLP .   

Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I rather like Jenny's offering!

In the old people's home I visit, it seems to need someone else to stir memory sharing, and they seem to organise that quite lot. In my visits I have to write down to stir Mum-in-law's memories and they do tend to be very mixed up, but at the same time I'm often talking to her neighbour who is younger, and has veyr sharp hearing and memories. Actually that lady appreciated your poem for Eleanor well, and I hope found it useful. Eleanor at first seemed to like it, but then got a bit confused, maybe partly as the Canadian language wasn't what she was used to! but thanks very much for that anyway, and I think she appreciated the interest, and the love, and encouragement to trust the Lord. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on

Hi Rhiannonw, Thank you so much for your interest. As you felt the same as I, Jenny's words were just right. 

Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on

On behalf of Jenny and I, thank you for the cherries. This poem I spent much thought and action on would not have been fulfilled without the cracker jack of the last stanza by Jenny.  

Richard L. Provencher