vortex

By seafret

Fri, 27 Aug 2010
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Constrained restrained I meet you,
Vortex.
Wild walls of whirling wind greet you
Thoughts preparing to spin out
Wound back in
Skeined
Unrefined
Grated raw by debris
Detritus
Scraping the skin
Laying bare for you to see
From the outside must seem blurred.
No invite in.

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Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
"wild walls of whirling wind greet you" - brilliant line. I really enjoyed this piece seafret. Welcome to abc - I hope you post more soon!

 

Submitted by seafret on
You are very kind. It's an old poem, I'm sifting through the tons of dross to find the not so drossy! I hope for lots of critical comments to move things along in my writing.

Submitted by Kahdai on
This is great rythem K

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "