Awakening
By shoe
Mon, 25 Jan 2010
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I wake, I stretch, my supple back
arches, curves, delights,
Hair caught in a chic French pleat,
Chaste, until you touch my nape,
Hands flutter in girlish modesty,
Shy, despite myself,
I catch myself, rhythmically slipping
The heels of my shoes, on and off...
My concentration elsewhere
And I blush, because...
The Celtic cross is silver, heavy,
Cool beneath the cloth,
I finger it, remembering...
You catch it in your mouth,
It wakes a sea of shivers
As it travels south,
The cool cotton chills
The scent of you still
On the pillows, the sheets and on me,
Tomorrow, you, forever, beckons...
Lulled by hope , I breathe in dreams
The awakening completes.
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There is one word for this
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
There is one word for this poem, Shoe - and that is 'beautiful' ;) I really, really love how fluid this poem is - it flows so well and I like all the little detail's you've used - like the inclusion of the Celtic cross! Well done!
Magic xxx
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Magic has said it all. Just
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Magic has said it all. Just beautiful;-)
Tina
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I love it, too. The 'scene
I love it, too. The 'scene changes' and lulling rhythm of it. Cheered me up, well done.
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I like it too but the typos
I like it too but the typos are very annoying.
Line 2 should be 'arches'
Line 5 should be 'hands'
3rd last line: lose the apostrophe after beckons'
Sorry, but it's a lovely poem and deserves proper English and I am an old pedant.
A cherry awaits!
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Yet again you bring
Yet again you bring incredible depth and atmosphere - well done on the cherry, it was deserved (even if tc is an old pedant) :--)
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