defences

By shoe

Tue, 09 Feb 2010
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11 comments
 

I’ve stumbled across the line again,
Tripped, stripped, wanting
only to be liked.
Shame burns as ice burns.
I’ll put my trusting self away
Deep down dark inside,
Where there is no price to pay.
She was over-rated anyway.

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Comments

Submitted by kheldar on
Gritty, to the point, this really stirs the emptions: shame, bitterness, loss. Great stuff as usual Shirley, David xx :--)

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Submitted by shoe on
Thank you David, much appreciated,:~}xx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
David has taken the words right out of my mouth. Another little gem, Shirley and no mistake;-) Tina x

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Short but very beautiful, Shirley! As David said - to the point, but all the better for it ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new shoe Yes" I to agree. But for lines of word's I like: Iv'e stumbled acroos the line again, Tripped,stripped,wanting only to be liked. So complete in a few words. I often put my foot in it! expression. julie x (:-

Submitted by Kahdai on
I like how you actually/ pull your trusting self away Deep down dark inside,/ as so many people do and never realize it. Kahdai

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by shoe on
Thanks Julie, I do too!

 

Submitted by shoe on
Thank you Kahdai, we are told to trust more aren't we, but this makes us vulnerable, so there is a paradox,:~}

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Aah paradox! Yes I suppose it is, or atleast a contradiction, like the smiley. K

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Chundar on
A good piece,touches on those moments we all like to forget

Submitted by shoe on
Thanks Chundar, yup, we all have 'em!