I would

Cherry

By shoe

Mon, 08 Feb 2010
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I would pencil you an attic
to archive childish doubts.
Paint a hatch of primary colours,
Crayon on a lock.

I would use spilt pools of India ink
for where the darkness lies,
Fingerprinting every doorway
with an indigo surmise.

In pastel shades and charcoal,
I would sketch your history,
Blur and smudge the edges,
Defining only me.

I would outline you on parchment.
Trace around your soul.
Brush away the chalk dust,
To let your colours show.

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Comments

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
'I would sketch your history, Blur and smudge the edges, Defining only me.' - just love these lines, Shoe! And this is a truly wonderful poem - definitely one of my favourites of yours ;) Well done on this one! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Firebird on
Wow Shoe! I absolutely adore this x It is beautiful in it's construction , imagery and emotion x:)

 

Submitted by shoe on
Magic, you say the nicest things, My confidence truly appeciates your words,:~}

 

Submitted by kheldar on
"I would pencil you an attic to archive childish doubts." Shirley, I just love these opening lines. The whole theme is brilliant and works really well. Clever stuff. David xx

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Submitted by shoe on
firebird, Wow, a wow is wonderful from you, many many thanks,

 

Submitted by shoe on
Thank you so much David, I find it impossible to decide if I like what I have written, so your approval is more than welcome and means so much, Shirley xx

 

Submitted by Beeme on
This is so beautiful Shoe, I love the idea of redefining the person. My favourite stanza; 'In pastel shades and charcoal, I would sketch your history, Blur and smudge the edges, Defining only me.' Beeme xx

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Submitted by shoe on
I think this may be my favourite bit too, though a little egocentric! though there are some bits my history that could do with some smudging,:~}