petal
By shoe
Fri, 09 Apr 2010
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An inevitable sad confetti,
Endings masquerade as promises.
The fallen petals are husks,
Remnants of a nonviable fruit.
Each tiny petal is perfectly formed,
Already I knew her face.
They are soft and fragrant in my hands,
An imitation of life.
I know they have already begun to decay,
Somewhere inside.
They bleed, return to the earth,
An unblemished existence.
Despite my cupped hands,
They fall, become dust.
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I really like this shoe!
Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I really like this shoe!
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Simple and beautiful, just
Simple and beautiful, just like me, but without the beautiful part, me that is, not your poem, the poem is beautiful AND simple, I is just simple, i'll be going now.
David xx
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Aaw shoe, I don't know what
Aaw shoe, I don't know what your thought behind this is, it seems very sad, it is beautiful though. K xx
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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This is so beautiful,
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
This is so beautiful, Shirley. I love your delicate imagery that gives a soft yet sad air to the poem. Well done!
Magic xxx
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Hi Shirley, I could be way
Hi Shirley,
I could be way of beam here, but I read it as a woman wanting a baby but there being no man in her life, or at least non man who is willing, to fulfill his side of the biological miracle.
David
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I kind of agree with
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
I kind of agree with Kheldar, in as much as the failed pregnancy goes but not sure that there is a longing for a baby or a man; more an observation. Lovely poem though, really enjoyed.
Of course, it is a well known fact that every woman needs a man, I mean phff...everyone knows that, don't they? ;) LOL
Nice one Shirley ;)
Chris
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Aaw! that's what I thought
Aaw! that's what I thought it was wanting a baby & couldn't have one! I then wondered if it was my own longing for a baby influenced that reading! Kahdai xx
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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Great poem, but it should be
Great poem, but it should be 'existence'.
I especially like the line:
'Endings masquerade as promises.'
J x
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