On Golden Pond

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Tue, 06 Mar 2012
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The milky-way sets
in the west; pendulous...
languid – a zillion
fairy-lights entangled
in the willow overhangs a pond,
and to the east – nudging
the horizon – Sirius;
a beacon – flashes
orange, green,
and red.

Bold Orion –
astride his steed
dons his dazzling belt,
as the moon, moons down;
vespers etched upon her face,
while wafts on the breeze –
the sound of the stars, going at it,
hammer and tongs; hell-bent
on rearranging themselves
as evening drips away
on golden pond.

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Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
I don't know if I have this right Tina, but I do believe you wrote this one about your own pond in your garden last night. I only say this, because the moon and stars were shining so clearly last night. The planets were so close, you could almost touch them. Your wonderful descriptions in this poem, relate such beauty in the sky, I loved the idea of:- the sound of the stars, going at it, hammer and tongs; hell-bent on rearranging themselves as evening drips away on golden pond. Loved the title too. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Yes, you are so right, Jenny;-) It was such a fantastic night for star-gazing. So clear, as you say, but very, very cold. So pleased you enjoyed and that you told me in such a lovely way;-) Tina

 

Submitted by Highhat on
There are very few stars I recognize Tina and you made these constellations shine for me. Starry nights are a wonder. Something I also enjoy when I get the chance. Thank you so much for sharing your experience. :) Pia

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Pia...remind me to give you a few lessons on 'star-gazing' one of these days;-) Very many thanks for your lovely words...and it was my pleasure;-) Tina

 

Submitted by Anvar2 on
A Beautiful poem, deeply evocative. A few words stuck out as a little odd for the feel of the poem 'zillion', 'moons' (as a verb). But even the physical shape of the poem is really effective. Great job!

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Pleased you picked up on the 'niceties', Anvar. Much apreciated, and am delighted you enjoyed;-) Tina

 

Submitted by jolono on
We don't get stars where I'm from, the smog blocks them all out! But seriously, lovely words creating fantastic images.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I know what you mean...and I count my lucky stars (excuse the pun;-) that I live where I do. It really is the most amazing place for looking at stars...but not so good if you want to catch a bus or a train to anywhere. Still, I guess you can't have everything;-) Many thanks for reading, and for taking the trouble to comment, so positively. Tina;-)

 

Submitted by lailoken on
Eloquent and vivid!

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Many thanks, Lailoken;-) Tina

 

Submitted by oldpesky on
Hi Tina, I thought of you on Monday night when getting a quick star-gazing lesson from young pesky while in Balmaha on the eastern shore of Loch Lomond. So glad you put that night into words. We may have been hundreds of miles apart but we shared the warmth of the stars in our hearts and endured the cold of the night for as long as possible.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Hi there, op. Yes, Monday was a very special night, and I am pleased that young pesky 'took you in hand' so to speak;-) Thanks for your lovely words. Tina

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
I first learnt to star-gaze when on a coach coming back from Newcastle during Freshers week. The girl sitting next to me that taught me all about Sirius and Orion ended up becoming my best friend here in Durham - thanks for taking me back, Tina ;-) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Hey - that's great, Magic. Now you really do sound like quite an authority on 'heavenly bodies'. Glad you enjoyed this one;-) Tina xxx