His Will be Done

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Sun, 23 Mar 2014
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8 comments
 
Always there – between her breasts,
that small, silver crucifix I gave her
for her 21st. A man, slightly tarnished, 
hanging there; arms making a V sign
at the sky...just where her skin was warm
and damp from a shower – glistening; 
her clothes and mine in the closet 
surreptitiously mingling, 
or so we’d joshed.
 
That small, silver cross, catching 
the light...the colour of the rain
as it pooled in little puddles, along
the tilted lane, where we’d scrimped
and saved – bought a house...that hour, 
that day, that year, that now...is cradled 
in my palms, and I, as He, make a V sign
at the sky, and get no  reply
to my asking,
Why?
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Comments

Submitted by Bee on

Really pleasing play with sounds that fit like a jigsaw puzzle. I like how you use the crucifix as a focal point that takes you down through the story to the question at the end. Wonderful imagery, too. I think this is one of your best, Tina. Only one of them, mind - you have so many bests to choose from.

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Bee...thank you, kindly, for your words.  They mean much to me.

Tina

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

The crucifix is very potent. Tugs at the heart and raises alot of questions on faith. Moved by this.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thank you, so much, Vera. As ever, you homed in to the poem's very nub.

Tina

 

 

Submitted by RJF on

Gave me goosbumps again, you get me everytime. Beautuful and heartbreaking.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Obliged to you, RJF. More than.

Tina

 

Submitted by Frances Macaula... on

As always, meticulously layered and carefully constructed.

Another fine poem, Tina.  You must know I'm a fan!

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Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

It seems we meet again, Frances and I much appreciate your popping by.  Pleased you enjoyed and grateful you took the time and trouble in telling me.smiley

Tina