Picture Imperfect

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Tue, 24 Jul 2012
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12 comments
 

Close my eyes
and I can see you...
walking, barefoot,
amongst the dunes...
a distant hill
shrugging off
a whisper
of a cloud.

There is a garden;
a wooden folly
with a bell-tower;
a stable
with a hay-loft...
rafters – in the shape
off an ‘x’ – decked
with forget-me-nots.

Your favourite,
ditzy, knitted
blue, Afghan hat
covers your ears
and still
it makes me smile.

It is sunset.
You are kneeling...
head bowed –
for all the world
as if you’re praying...

cupping
a fallen bird;
a wren
or a sparrow
in your hands.

You are that prayer,
this moment
this vivid...
and yet,
already
the picture
is fading.

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Comments

Submitted by jolono on
Absolutely beautiful Tina,paints a very very vivid picture.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thank you, jolono. Pleased you thought so, and that you took the trouble to tell me;-) Tina

 

Submitted by blighters rock on
A visitation borne from the spark between the deepest love imaginable and a longing so powerful that it trips the mind into actually being there. Even a distant reader cannot fail to be included in this dreamy landscape.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thanks, blighter's;-) You really do have such a way with words. Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
I think Richard got my feelings exactly on this poem Tina, I couldn't have put it better myself. It's so good to be able to see a time a place so vividly, that we actually feel that we're there. Very gentle and soothing to read. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Pleased you thought so, Jenny. Much appreciated, and I hope the weather where you are, is as wonderful as it is here today. Have been digging in the vegetable patch the livelong day, and am exhausted now, and look forward to dinner; a barbecue, courtesy of hubby;-) Tina

 

Submitted by Anvar2 on
Always beautiful. This is the kind of thing that makes me glad to be back on abctales. Thanks for sharing such evocative words.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Anvar, such a lovely thing to say, very much appreciated, and welcome back;-) Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Gosh Tina, I admire you getting out in the garden in this heat, all I want to do is be in the shade, though it's a lot cooler today. Hope you enjoyed your barbecue. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I did...and thanks again, Jenny;-)

 

Submitted by blighters rock on
Hi Tina, This may surprise you but my inspiration when commenting on work I see comes directly from and because of the power of the words I read, so, with that in mind, thank you for your way with words. Richard

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
;-)