EBOLOWA 32
By simonmiller15
Wed, 16 Mar 2016
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32
A much revised version of EBOLOWA will be on sale in book shops and online at Unbound.com.
Details to follow as and when.
many thanks meantime to readers at ABC
and good luck.
simon
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Hi Simon,
Permalink Submitted by Sandy Hogarth on
Hi Simon,
It's going well.
Para One - what sort of shopping. Your reaser will think of palstic bags full of Tesco crap. Chance to show some colour - what is ticking out eg bread sticks etc.
Para 2 good and punchy
Why a 'shrewd ' mind. Need to sgow why
Good tension at end of 1st section.
Love the broken nail detail. Reminds us where she comes from
Not sure I get the Beth.. day at office.' Or is it too long since I read it.
Remainder works well
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