Getting it Right

By skinner_jennifer

Thu, 25 Oct 2012
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You know
you're nearly
there just need
a helping hand...
see it through to
another dawn,

let no man come
near this wondrous
presence abiding,
for it dwindles
slowly with the tide,

up and down,
drifting like
the ebb and flow
upon the shore
of our existence,

a wind will not
protect us from the
angry storm, life is
for taking...not forsaking,

it's not adventure that
fulfilled the womb, but
stability that gives pleasure,
lifting the spirit so high,

accumulating like the banker
who cannot fail...he knows
the order of the day, taking
chances along the way,

we grasp what we can,
to feel that joyous sensation,
not really knowing if what
we have is tangible...but
hoping we're getting it right.

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Submitted by Highhat on
There is much wisdom in these lines Jenny- maybe it is a stream of consciousness poem you have written here? ;)Pia

Submitted by moonphish on
a wonderfully smoke filled poem about the unclarity that living provides us...beautifully expressed

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Good afternoon Pia, thankyou for your words of wisdom and I think you are definitely right about the stream of consciousness. Sometimes I'm surprised by my own words. He...he! Anyway hope you have a good evening and have a good weekend and again thankyou for reading. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi moonphish, wow! what a great comment, your words blew me away. Thanks so much for reading, really appreciated. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I couldn't agree with moonphish and Pia more...I think a stream of consciousness suits it admirably. Tina.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Tina I've read this poem so many times, and still don't know what it's about. Very strange thing this stream of consciousness. The only other poem that I had a similar experience with, was one I wrote about Norman Wisdom when he died, it was just words coming into my head and I needed to get them down. Anyway I much appreciate you reading and letting me know your thoughts. Thankyou. Jenny.

 

Submitted by jeand on

HI Jenny

 

This is a lovely hopeful poem.  You portray so well, the struggle that some to just keep going.

Jean Day

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Jean,

thank you for reading and commenting. I honestly have no idea what I was writing about, it was just words that came into my head, but glad you were able to take something from the poem.

Many thanks again.

Jenny.