Loss Of Face

By skinner_jennifer

Tue, 28 Jul 2015
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8 comments
 

Don't burden me

with pearly tears,

those endless nights

of endurance,

 

when skin touched skin...

flap jacking, as sweet

honey kisses mingle

with our juices,

 

never before did flattery

greet me so blatantly,

had me smitten at the altar,

a sacrifice to the slaughter,

 

my ignorant intellect, attraction...

leading me to a disregard

for idle words; arrows on target –

a bullseye scored,

 

as I yearn to join the flock,

treating what they say

as flotsam and jetsam,

their cautions snubbed.

 

your enchantment consumed

like a fine wine; now leaves a

disagreeable tang, that smacks

of sour lemons, as I fear loss of face.

 

 

 

 

 

Certificate 15
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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

A picture of sad regret and, I suppose, gullibility? The ending of disagreeble after-tang and fear of shame in admission of naivety is very telling. Maybe a desire to help others take care?
Did you mean 'altar' rather than 'alter'? Rhiannon

 

Submitted by rayjones on

I hope your poem, as good as it was, is not about anything current. It so full of bitterness and pain, good job sharing your feelings so eloquently. Ray

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi there Rhiannon,

firstly can I say thank you for the help with the spelling which I'll put right straight away. Yes you were right in your thoughts, I think that old saying; love is blind, is so true when you're young and in love.

Thank you for reading and leaving a comment.

Jenny.

 

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi there ray,

no don't worry it's not recent, it was just a piece of writing that came into my head, when I was thinking of a relationship I was in when I was young. Strange how thoughts can take you back to another time.

Thank you for reading and I'll be over to read your story.

Happy writing.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by hilary west on

Well-written poem, Jenny. I guess it is a story told too many times for a lot of people.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Many thanks again for reading Hilary,

yes! I think you're right, when we're in love we never listen to the words of friends who tell us we're making the biggest mistake of our lives.

Appreciate your comment.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Jenny

I liked this poem, but it was full of heart ache - and you portrayed it so convincingly - I too wondered if it was a current emotion. But memories last a long time.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Jean,

thank goodness! No it's not a current emotion, it was many years ago, when I was warned not to marry, but didn't listen to the wise words.

Thank you for reading and your thoughts.

Jenny.