Lost Souls

By skinner_jennifer

Sun, 13 Oct 2013
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19 comments
 

I wept in the ruins

of unheard whispers,

as savage gales swept

across vacant landscape,

 

challenging the hesitant observers,

woefully...the death knell rings out..

reclaiming its kindred,

 

body weak...succumbs to

silhouette shapes,

now inhabiting this

complex network

that is me.

 

As night draws in,

feelings of loneliness

residing round every corner,

the tumbledown – ramshackle buildings,

weep for the men and women

who perished,

 

like ghosts...souls

move in white waves

of dust,

anointing the earth

with their tears.

 

 

 

Certificate PG
Poem
Poems
Spiritual

Comments

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

It is ghostly and the shape is mysterious.     Elsie

Submitted by catherine poarch on

Jenny, I like the shape too, weaving in and out. And the anointing at the end. It paints a clear and haunting picture. Would love to know what event you're writing about or is it imaginary? Well, on the anniversary of the Battle of the Battle of Hastings I'm going to remember the fallen!  smiley

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

This is so very beautiful, Jenny.  You have excelled yourself.  Atmospheric and emotive.

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

Beautiful writing, Jenny. It sort of drifts over you as you read through what looks like a single standing lonely column. 

 

 

 

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Good afternoon Elsie,  thank you for your kind comment.  You got the idea of what I was trying to get across in this poem.  I do appreciate you reading.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Catherine,  this poem was completely from my imagination, but I did have an idea of may be a place of a long ago battle,  or an event that left a lasting print on a ghost town.  Thank you for taking the time out to read and leave a comment and I'm so glad you enjoyed reading.  Big smiles from me.  smiley  Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Good afternoon Tina,  I'm so happy that you liked this poem.  Glad you could appreciate the atmosphere and that it conjured up emotion...definitely what I was trying to evoke.  Always appreciate your words and thank you for letting me know.  Jenny.   

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Bee,  good to hear from you.   Can I just say,  I never thought of a single standing column when I was writing this poem,  I was just trying out different ways of writing and I sort of liked this and decided to go with it,  glad I did now.  I'm so grateful to you for reading and for taking the time out to let me know.  Thank you.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by scratch on

yesI too like it very much Jenny, especially this:

"souls 

move in white waves of dust, 

anointing the earth 

with their tears."
 
Super stuff!
 

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi there scratch,  I have to admit those lines were some of my favourites too.  Appreciate you stopping by to read and thank you for letting me know your thoughts. Jenny.  yes  and a big smiley face from me.  smiley

 

Submitted by hudsonmoon on

Really do love that las stanza, Jenny. Great ending.

Rich

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Richard...thanks ever so much for stopping by and reading my poem,  very much appreciated.  Glad you enjoyed and grateful to you for letting me know.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

The shape of this gives it another layer entirely, Jenny. Your ghostly images, full of white nostalgia, really come to life against that column shape. Splendid.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi there Vera,  I've been on a bit of a spiritual journey just lately.  Glad you enjoyed reading.  You picked up on the ghostly images which made my day.  Thank you for reading and for letting me know.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by The royster on

Mysterious, Spiritual and spooky, as well as thought provoking.  Love it.  Roy

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

  Wow!  Roy that is truely a great compliment and I so appreciate it.  Thank you.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by celticman on

I thought the word patterning was in the shape of a woman, then I wasn't quite sure. Powerful words. 

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi there Celticman,

I'm so sorry I'm late to say thank you for your kind comment.  It never showed up on my email.

The shape you mentioned,  wasn't actually of anything...it just seemed to come together by accident.

Any way glad you enjoyed and appreciate you letting me know.

Jenny.  Big smiles from me.  smiley

 

 

Submitted by celticman on

maybe I'm just seeing things.