Where Darkness Once Was

Cherry

By skinner_jennifer

Sun, 22 Sep 2013
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20 comments
 

Cold – frozen caresses

penetrate my wounds,

as the swell now lessens

I struggle...

 

my insecure wounded visions

leave me afraid – trembling body

becomes frail as weakness torments.

 

Then;

 

putting my moment to rest,

eyes now shut tight,

I feel the stroke of

my feathered soul,

 

words spoken softly,

new light to guide,

rainbow colours

shine through,

where darkness

once was.

 

Certificate PG
Poem
Poems
Spiritual

Comments

Submitted by catherine poarch on

I don't know what inspired this but I see strength, hope, indomitablness if that's a word. The soul is stronger than we remember sometimes. I liked it. Catherine

 

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

Such inner strength here. I get a sense of reaching out for respite - then finding it.  Lovely.

Linda

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Deep stuff! I think it works that not everything is spelled out and the story could work in individual ways for each reader. A good poem.    Elsie

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Catherine,  can I say firstly that I love it when the reader comes up with their own feelings on the poem.  It was actually written last Winter,  when I was walking up the garden path and saw a black bird with a broken wing,  it affected me greatly and I felt really upset,  knowing that there wasn't anything I could do for the poor bird.  I realised that I had to write a poem from the black birds perspective and this was what came out of my feelings.  I just imagined myself as that bird and the release of finally death coming and no more pain.   Thank you so much for reading and I do so appreciate your words.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Linda,  you got it right,  it was about reaching out for respite...well at least it was for the poor black bird I saw with a broken wing.  I'm so glad you got something from reading this poem and I really do appreciate you letting me know.  Thank you also for reading.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Bear,  your intuition on this poem is spot on.  I always like to think that the soul goes on and on.  It's really good of you to read this poem and I'm so happy you enjoyed it.  Thank you for letting me know,  always appreciated.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Good mornning elsie,  your comment is exactly what I hoped for,  having the reader take from it,  what they will.  Your kind words more than made my day.  Thank you for taking the time out.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Good morning MissUnderstood,  I really appreciate you reading and I'm so glad you got what I was trying to say in this poem.  Thank you for your kind words,  they mean a lot.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi there editors,  I wasn't sure about this poem and have been holding on to it for quite some time,  but I was over the moon when I saw the cherries and I'm so glad I decided to put it on.  Thank you so much for making my Monday special. Big smiles.  smiley  Jenny.

 

Submitted by Bee on

I thought this was about release and dying, but with your explanation about the bird, although this is sad, it's so uplifting. I do think there's something anyone could take from these lovely words by way of comfort. Sweet poem, Jenny.

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Bee,  the release of dying was definitely what I was trying to convey,  when there is so much pain and no hope.  I'm so glad you could take something from this poem.  Your words more than made my day and thank you for reading,  always appreciated.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

What a stunning injection of hope, Jenny - despite the loss of the blackbird. I've read your muse for this and although it is deeply sad, I related the blackbird to growing confidence as well and that rainbow as a release of insecurities. Admire you writing about fear - not easy to do, but beautifully pulled off. Well deserving of its fruit.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Good morning Vera,  thank you so much for your in depth comment.  I'm so happy that you could take something from the words and really appreciate you letting me know.  Thanks again.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

A wonderful poem, Jenny...more than deserving of all its accolades.  I have no idea how I missed it before.  I guess life gets in the way sometimes.

Your writing goes from strength to strength, and you never cease to amaze me.  Thank you for amazing me today in such a delightful, if somewhat melancholy, way.

Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Tina,  thank you so much for your kind words.  I completely understand about missing pieces,  I'm always doing that.  Any way I'm glad that I could amaze you,  I sometimes amaze myself and wonder where the writing came from,  especially when I look back on some of my first pieces of writing. I know I wouldn't have improved without the help of people like yourself and for that I'm grateful.  Hope you are well and have a peaceful weekend.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by The royster on

Hi Jenny,  I love this excellent piece. In 2 words. Thought provoking, a light at the end of the tunnel!. Well worth those Cherries.  Roy 

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Good morning Roy, it's good to hear from you.  Thank you for your comment,  I like the fact you thought it was thought provoking...made my day.  Thanks also for the congrats,  cherries are always  nice arn't they?  Appreciate you stopping by.  Jenny. 

 

Submitted by The royster on

Cherries are a great way of letting us know our work is appreciated and of course read.  I think abc does a great job in this respect.  Hope I manage to get some more, haha.  Roy

 

Submitted by Shannan on

Amen Jenny, Thank-you so much for writing and posting this, need to know the light is still there. Stay fabulous! $

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thanks Shannon...always keep that light shining through.  Hope you're having a good day. smiley Jenny.