Behind the Bike Shed

By smokejack

Tue, 03 Sep 2013
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5 comments
 

After school

On a winters night

In the dark

Me and Jackie Cuddeson

Kissed for an eternity

 

We shivered from the cold

So we had to cuddle tighter

I remember her perfume

It had a fancy name

Something French

Like our kisses

 

We blew cold breath

In each other’s faces

And stared at the moon

That was as bright as a torch

With new batteries

 

This was forever

Until Mr Martin the Headmaster

Discovered us

And gave us both detention

The following day

 

Love can be cruel.

 

©JMcN 2013

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Comments

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

I like the tone and construction of this,  the youthfulness of the couple really comes through..  The last stanza says it all.

Linda

Submitted by smokejack on

HiLinda thanks for reading and comment - I had a flash back to that event in a dream last night which was weird! Glad you enjoyed reading.

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi smokejack,  great piece of writing on the subject of young love,  which more than likely many people can relate.  Good to read your work again,  hope you are well.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by smokejack on

Hi Jenny I'm ok thanks after a crap year last year but life goes on until your own clock stops! Thanks for taking time out to read my stuff I really do appreciate it. Hope all is well with you.

Submitted by Bee on

I liked this so much. Told as it would have been told back then. 'Moon that was as bright as a torch with new batteries' - that's very special.

Enjoyed!

Bee