Early Learning
By Steve Button
Sat, 18 Sep 2010
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In summer we helped mix
swill for penned and snouting pigs
the foul stink of fermenting dregs mashed
in a zinc bathtub with a shovel,
larger than life for two small boys.
There was death in it.
And then in the stifling dust-mote
speckled barn a dare to kick the bales
to unravel a settlement of rats
and send the dark shapes scuttling,
rabid, the shattering of the farmer's
gun. It seemed the noise not bullets
that killed them one by one.
Even the dust was in uproar.
These sudden small explosions of death
more visible but no easier to grasp
for boys with hands too small
to even lift a shovel.
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Feels like it escaped from
Feels like it escaped from Death of a Naturalist or Door into the Dark. Another really good poem. Well done.
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It definitely has the same
It definitely has the same feel tonally and in your language choices (which are again tightly controlled but seemingly effortless)but that's a compliment. Just because it echoes Heaney's style does not mean it is any less of a poem - at least in my humble opinion. Please stop writing such good poems! :-)
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Is this for the I.P?,
Is this for the I.P?, childhood and death, a poignant combination.
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Oh, every week, fridays
Oh, every week, fridays usually, one the editors of ABC set an inspiration point, if you go to the homepage it's listed on the left, along with poem of the week ect, your poem fitted the remit perfectly. which is why I asked,:}
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