Doubt

By Thebighand5

Tue, 13 Jan 2009
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I walked strait up and tore off Riggie’s face.
I apologized and threw it on his lap.
I walked away and was never seen again.
Riggie picked up his face and sung this piece...

Where the face has Riggie 2 gone?
And will he ever return?
When the face will Riggie 2 arrive
At the place where he’ll see the face?
And be united once again.

My one true love
Has left my eyes.
Has gone forever from my mind
To be united with the face
Upon the face’s hill.
But wait! But wait!
He shall return
With me within this place.
This humble town.
My only town.
For that would be THE FACE.

I will go, I will go!
I will go and seek my love!
My one and only
Beautiful
Passionate
Love.

I will destroy the tug of doubt.
That evil, cruel, heinous tug.
That discussing, little bad!

Who’s that, who’s that
Within my eye?
It’s a local baker.
Would he make me some bread
If he wasn’t dead?
Probably not
For he was damnable.

Will my love ever return?
Will my stomach stop this churn?
Will my soul be saved from burn?
Maybe I deserve a clout.
Of course he wont I’m full of doubt.

Certificate U
Love

Comments

Submitted by Geoff Smith on
I really love the rhythm and the distinctive beat of the alliteration and rhyme. I like the drama of your phrasing. You've gone a bit overboard witht the full-stops though.

Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.

Submitted by cobalt x on
This is a masterpiece of writing which if put into a book would sell millions! Publish this annonymous stranger now, before its too late! Who cares about the full stops, it just adds to the originality and distinctive rythymn.