Sunset Sonnet 1
By the_big_V
Thu, 07 Feb 2008
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When april rose with soothing showers of
Sublime swans that covers the horizon
I awoke on a sweet, soft, summer's day
Where the clouds in the sky carved incisions
I remember you, my love, my lady
My porcelain yin, my grateful angel
Forever you dwell in my sanity
Forever I comfort your lap's cradle
Over the forests of cherry blossoms
I cower and scream out my loneliness
I am in a storm of sorrow and I
Am sad that I watched the sunset--forlorn!
The roses still shed their pretty petals
And I still shed all of my bitter tears.
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ooo-la-la! Very emotive,
Permalink Submitted by littleditty on
ooo-la-la! Very emotive, colourful writing - i think covered to agree with the past tense remembering - comma after lady,full stop after angel. Enjoyed reading this and hope you get some technical crit re Sonnets, because i am unable! cheers
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