I'm on my own, it's better that way.

By TheSecretGirl

Thu, 04 Nov 2010
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Sometimes i feel lost,
excluded, i'm not deludeded.
I'm by myself, it's better that way.

For Every tradgic loss,
Makes me wonder,
Why we live to die.

Why we live to work,
why we work to live.
For work, to drive us to hate,

Why does it drive us to hate,
to hate what we once loved,
to break us down.

Sometimes i feel lost,
excluded, i'm not deludeded.
i'm by myself, it's better that way.

For Every tradgic loss,
makes me wonder,
why we live to die.

Why we live to lie,
why we lie to live,
for lies, to drive us to hate.

Why do we lie, to those we love,
to turn this into hate,
to break them down.

Sometimes i feel lost,
excluded, i'm not deludeded.
i'm by myself, it's better that way.

For Every tradgic loss,
makes me wonder,
why we live to die.

I'm on my own,it's better that way.

Certificate PG
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Comments

Submitted by TheSecretGirl on
Hi, please leave feedback, i'm new to this, Thank you x

Submitted by Dodgystrawberry on
I liked this ;-)

Lesser Mortals Have Superiority.

Submitted by TheSecretGirl on
Thank you :) is there anything you can suggest i do to improve it? x

Submitted by tcook on
Spelling! 'Tragic' and 'Deluded' are correct. Otherwise it's an interesting poem - the repetition works well - but finally it doesn't say a lot more than the sum of the words. Take a look at the work of a poet like Sylvia Plath and see what she does with similiar feelings.