Heaven in Autumn

By well-wisher

Sat, 18 Feb 2012

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3 comments

It is Autumn in Heaven; for my love, she is old
but time has only given; it has never stole
for her silver hair’s, to me, more precious than gold
and each line on her face brings a smile to my soul.

Comments

I like this very much

Permalink Submitted by scratch on Sun, 2012-02-19 00:03

I like this very much wellwisher. Honesty in words, really lovely. Gentle prompt, last word second line I think should be 'stolen'.

Thanks, Scratch. I will

Permalink Submitted by well-wisher on Sun, 2012-02-19 00:57

Thanks, Scratch. I will think about changing 'stole' to 'stolen' but I'm a very firm believer in 'Poetic License' so I may decide to keep it the way it is. Glad you liked it.

Oh look, a link. I wonder where it leads.

JoHn

Fair enough well-wisher, I

Permalink Submitted by scratch on Sun, 2012-02-19 08:51

Fair enough well-wisher, I can quite see why given the working rhyme. Either way it's a really delightful piece. :-)