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Whale bones

By onemorething on Mon, 14 Oct 2019

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Hares

By onemorething on Fri, 04 Oct 2019

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Autumn’s Iron

By onemorething on Mon, 30 Sep 2019

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My Napoleon

By onemorething on Sun, 29 Sep 2019

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This is really good. I think

Posted on Tue, 20 Aug 2019

This is really good. I think it encapsulates the issues / dilemmas of antidepressants really well for those who take them. I like how you’ve managed to include the routine submission to taking them too. It’s a sad poem, but an experience that is...

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I like the ideas, the use of

Posted on Tue, 20 Aug 2019

I like the ideas, the use of speech and the effort of your rhymes. You hint at the father being difficult, ‘taunting’, but don’t reveal enough perhaps here for me? I guess I think you could base it more on this? What are you trying to tell / say...

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These are very sweet and nice

Posted on Mon, 19 Aug 2019

These are very sweet and nice to hear you reading them. You have captured childish states well with these, I think. :)

Posted in KidsSpeak

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This is a lovely, delicate

Posted on Thu, 15 Aug 2019

This is a lovely, delicate poem. Like a leaf of a poem actually with its hint of darkness too. I loved, ‘breathe leaf breath’ and the threatening wind.

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This is very lovely. I like

Posted on Wed, 14 Aug 2019

This is very lovely. I like your use of emphasis, but all wonderful.

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Rhiannon, these are so good.

Posted on Mon, 12 Aug 2019

Rhiannon, these are so good. I have been popping back to read them in turn. Though I enjoyed hearing your Welsh accent too - which is poetic in itself, I think. April and December are my favourites - perhaps for what they describe as much as your...

Posted in Through the year month by month

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Such an interesting piece of

Posted on Tue, 13 Aug 2019

Such an interesting piece of writing about memory. Enjoyed it very much. Made me think of synapses as light or stars. Lovely.

Posted in Remembering

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Aha, so this is the lost ID

Posted on Thu, 01 Aug 2019

Aha, so this is the lost ID poem! It's very good indeed and as Rhiannon says above, neatly done. Also I missed passports on my long list of things that would have my name on! (I might edit to see if I can squeeze passports in!) I remember this...

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So lovely. Some very

Posted on Sun, 28 Jul 2019

So lovely. Some very beautiful lines.

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Thanks David. Just the

Posted on Fri, 26 Jul 2019

Thanks David. Just the thought of Boris Johnson gives me a shudder. It would be nice to think though, wouldn’t it, that we could all embrace more of our humanity. Thanks for reading my poem and leaving such a thoughtful comment.