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Some lush detail here. Felt
Posted on Tue, 16 Feb 2016
Some lush detail here. Felt slightly confused if it was by a river or a sci fi scene, the perspectives seem to shift.
In Nottingham there used to be a street busker, a guy. He played the xylophone. He reminded me of a spider monkey. This raised memories of him somehow. Some soft language here that conveys not only a moment but sounds of nostalgia,
I look forward to part two. Lots appealed to me, the short sentences (such a sucker for commas and brevity), very colloquial narrative voice, the deep poison arrows of pain you managed to balance in the trio of betrayal. Well done.
The house concept coupled with the confessional narrator makes for a seemingly light recollection yet each house carries more emotional weight through to that penultimate stanza. Interestingly, I think you can get two very different settings and...
Such satisfying half and full rhyme here. A stunning paradise and then the close so unsettling with its admission of his untruths. Unusual words give it more Tropicana. Apologies for the brand name, could have said the man from Del Monte....
Some lush detail here. Felt
Posted on Tue, 16 Feb 2016
Some lush detail here. Felt slightly confused if it was by a river or a sci fi scene, the perspectives seem to shift.
Read full commentPosted in Travel Talks
In Nottingham there used to
Posted on Tue, 16 Feb 2016
In Nottingham there used to be a street busker, a guy. He played the xylophone. He reminded me of a spider monkey. This raised memories of him somehow. Some soft language here that conveys not only a moment but sounds of nostalgia,
Read full commentPosted in The Lady that Played Piano
Just come to this one, Airy.
Posted on Sun, 14 Feb 2016
Just come to this one, Airy. Richly detailed, significant things brought to the forefront with confident storytelling. A clear voice.
Read full commentPosted in The Net Caster (Part Four)
I look forward to part two.
Posted on Sun, 14 Feb 2016
I look forward to part two. Lots appealed to me, the short sentences (such a sucker for commas and brevity), very colloquial narrative voice, the deep poison arrows of pain you managed to balance in the trio of betrayal. Well done.
Read full commentPosted in Play, You...Play Me
The house concept coupled
Posted on Thu, 04 Feb 2016
The house concept coupled with the confessional narrator makes for a seemingly light recollection yet each house carries more emotional weight through to that penultimate stanza. Interestingly, I think you can get two very different settings and...
Read full commentPosted in My Father's House
I really like folk tales.
Posted on Tue, 02 Feb 2016
I really like folk tales. This is refreshing, takes you on a trip. The old images have been re worked, too.
Read full commentPosted in The Baobab Tree.
There is a Mary Poppins feel
Posted on Wed, 27 Jan 2016
There is a Mary Poppins feel to this, Tina. An eclectic arrangement that works very effectively with sound and the imagery, so delicate and pretty.
Read full commentPosted in Bird (Poetry Monthly)
Such satisfying half and full
Posted on Wed, 20 Jan 2016
Such satisfying half and full rhyme here. A stunning paradise and then the close so unsettling with its admission of his untruths. Unusual words give it more Tropicana. Apologies for the brand name, could have said the man from Del Monte....
Read full commentPosted in Sarsparilla Dreaming
Some very detailed scene
Posted on Sun, 17 Jan 2016
Some very detailed scene setting.Welcome to ABCTales, hope you write some more of your story.
Read full commentPosted in First date story extract 1
Why, you robbing scounderel.
Posted on Fri, 15 Jan 2016
Why, you robbing scounderel.
Read full commentPosted in I stole this poem from Vera
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