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This was such fun!

Posted on Tue, 24 Nov 2015

This was such fun!

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Posted in A skeuomorphic diet for … (Poetry Monthly)

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It's a very well realised

Posted on Wed, 25 Nov 2015

It's a very well realised story with very sharp observations which contribute significantly to the tension. It was reassuring at the close - a satisfactory ending that gives your reader something to take away in a restorative fuzzy way.

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Posted in The Station

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Agreed, Tina. Barbaric.

Posted on Mon, 23 Nov 2015

Agreed, Tina. Barbaric. Numbering the badger has a powerful reverse psychology here. Second person shift is unusual and destabilising - it works really well to distance yourself from the emotion and place your reader central to it. Plus it has...

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Posted in Through the Grass, Darkly...

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The repetition and rhyme in

Posted on Thu, 19 Nov 2015

The repetition and rhyme in this love song makes something restorative of deep loss.It sounds soothing, it's very well composed, satisfying to hear aloud.

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Posted in Rupture (Poetry Monthly)

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The key image of chick and

Posted on Wed, 18 Nov 2015

The key image of chick and the emotions of letting go with flight are so delicately spun together in a gorgeous snapshot. It's evocative, the rich scents and .the outdoors steep it in a specific time and place . I love this.

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Posted in Supplication

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I liked the pulls and drags

Posted on Fri, 13 Nov 2015

I liked the pulls and drags of this, how the setting soothes.

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Posted in Home

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Wonderful use of a very

Posted on Fri, 13 Nov 2015

Wonderful use of a very fitting analogy. I hope all's well in your silvery world.

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Posted in Joyride

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Hi cassis, it's nostalgic and

Posted on Sun, 18 Oct 2015

Hi cassie, it's nostalgic and very candid. A thoughtful response to the brief. I would consider taking 'meandering' out as bit cliched and 'had' on line 3 could go for smoother ride.

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Posted in End of the road (Poetry Monthly)

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I think the narrative stream

Posted on Fri, 16 Oct 2015

I think the narrative stream works as a child's distraction very well. I think you could take the double 'no no' 'yes yes' out and have singulars without it affecting structure. More natural. I'd be inclined to take more out - make your reader...

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317 of my comments have received 322 Great Feedback votes

This was such fun!

It's a very well realised

Agreed, Tina. Barbaric.

The repetition and rhyme in

The key image of chick and

I liked the pulls and drags

Wonderful use of a very

Hi cassis, it's nostalgic and

I think the narrative stream

What a super piece. Dark and

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