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The present tense gives it
Posted on Sun, 06 Dec 2015
The present tense gives it immediacy and as far as I can see, you stay on track. Some lovely description and a sense of drama. You could perhaps reduce your use of adjectives in some parts so it doesn't feel too overloaded as it ends up reducing...
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Hypnotised me! Superb.
Posted on Sun, 06 Dec 2015
Hypnotised me! Superb.
Read full commentPosted in Solemates (Poetry Monthly)
Had a very interesting
Posted on Sat, 05 Dec 2015
Had a very interesting discussion about plot and the surreal in stories. Thought of your work. Sometimes you can have startling ambiguity in a piece and that sense of not necessarily being given the pencil to join all the dots because it doesnt...
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Oh it's lovely Marcia. Your
Posted on Thu, 03 Dec 2015
Oh it's lovely Marcia. Your language is delicate, very soothing to see, too. Really excited you've had a go. The repetition in this strikes me - the gulls gulls gulls. My favourite is the use of brackets - rays of sun? I think so. If you tag it...
Read full commentPosted in look away ..... .... ... .. . . . . . ."Poetry Monthly"
Horridly painful, an
Posted on Fri, 04 Dec 2015
Horridly painful, an unbearable device to use before and after in that interchangeable way which we know isnt so. A powerful, well drawn piece.
Read full commentPosted in Preparing to Meet Your Goliath
This is simply put but has
Posted on Wed, 02 Dec 2015
This is simply put but has universal connections. I like how it ends unfixed.
Read full commentPosted in Dark Places
Welcome to ABCTales, Ken. I
Posted on Wed, 02 Dec 2015
Welcome to ABCTales, Ken. An interesting ntroduction, perhaps the formatting could be adjusted to set your text in bigger paragraph blocks so you can fit more per page.
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Some innovative word play and
Posted on Tue, 01 Dec 2015
Some innovative word play and original imagery.
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This is sweetly nostalgic. It
Posted on Mon, 30 Nov 2015
This is sweetly nostalgic. It reminds me of wolves in the mountains even though it's people based.
Read full commentPosted in The Blessed Skin
What a gorgeous concept.
Posted on Fri, 27 Nov 2015
What a gorgeous concept.
Read full commentPosted in The Snowflake Collector – 7: Every Day Brought New Gifts Now
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