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Found this deeply moving. I

Posted on Tue, 22 Sep 2015

Found this deeply moving. I think it's the simplicity you've opted for. Not that it isn't complex but your colloquial dialogue, those deliberately chosen acts of togetherness don't seem a big deal until that last stanza. You nail that fear and...

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Posted in 'Mine's a Saveloy!'

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The personification of that

Posted on Tue, 22 Sep 2015

The personification of that black dog is really powerful. All that darkness and the confines of the mind well conveyed, here.

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Posted in Lurker

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I like this. Opening stanza's

Posted on Tue, 22 Sep 2015

I like this. Opening stanza's rhythm sounds like a train on tracks. Is that intentionally worked or magic? I know, I know. Lots of relationship debris and the allusion of violence, hot on many well-cultured heels. Your subject(s) often feels...

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Posted in Kickings from my Sweetheart

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Brilliant, Tina. Inspired and

Posted on Sun, 20 Sep 2015

Brilliant, Tina. Inspired and often found, well paced, conveys the ghastly small talk and life going on.

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Posted in Why Does it Always Rain at Funerals? (Poetry Monthly)

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Really scenic and

Posted on Thu, 17 Sep 2015

Really scenic and transporting.

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Posted in On A Cloud

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A lovely one, Paul.

Posted on Thu, 17 Sep 2015

A lovely one, Paul.

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Posted in A Picture Of You

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The pace of this accentuates

Posted on Thu, 17 Sep 2015

The pace of this accentuates the words beautifully, in places it is resurgent and then reaches a crescendo of uninhibited expression. Homage, indeed. Has echoes of Baudelaire's Fleurs du Mal, too.

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Posted in Homage to Mr. Ginsberg

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This is so apt and carefully

Posted on Mon, 14 Sep 2015

This is so apt and carefully arranged. That flower, that single human, how easily crushed but how esily helped, too. Worked with unaccompanied asylum seeking children from the point of dispersal - straight from lorry to hostel. All those one acts...

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Posted in Poem For a Flower

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This is really good. Shifting

Posted on Wed, 09 Sep 2015

This is really good. Shifting perceptions for your reader, mix of ghostly and surreal, the level of fine detail I tend to expect of your work. 

 

Have deliberated if it should open: 'It was starting to rain when I arrived home that...

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Posted in Smudge

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Hi Jesse, it's an interesting

Posted on Mon, 07 Sep 2015

Hi Jesse, it's an interesting read. Some lovely metaphors and descriptions.

Difficult to follow without paragraph breaks. Perhaps you could put those in?

Think you could cut Adolpho's detailed character description - height, clothes...

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Posted in The Funeral

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