Zorro by brighteyes

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Sat, 2007-04-07 00:30

Margharita

Zorro by brighteyes

I really liked this one. Great images - as always - and the rhythm of the poem totally captured the feel of the animal.

And I've been watching those orang-utans on the telly...

http://www.abctales.com/story/brighteyes/zorro

Sat, 2007-04-07 12:43

neilmc

I love this one as well!! Mind you, I've been lucky enough to visit an orang-utan colony in Malaysia (it was orang-utans, wasn't it?) and it wonderfully evokes that gorgeous, droopy ginger animal (not me, folks!). My wife pointed out the two made-up words in the second line but they are so clearly evocative that I didn't mind.

Wed, 2007-04-11 19:30

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brighteyes

Wow - I'd love to visit one of the sanctuaries. Yeah - those made-up words seemed the only ones quite right to describe the motion - are they too irritating? Cheers neil!

"I have a room for life at the Home for the Chronically Groovy."

Wed, 2007-04-11 21:03

I really liked this. Cleverly visual.

Wed, 2007-04-11 21:43

rokkitnite

For the sake of the metre, I'd like to see 'remained' changed to 'stayed'. That is my only quibble. I really enjoyed this poem - the imagery made it feel like a fantastic adventure.

Thu, 2007-04-12 12:29

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brighteyes

Consider it done! Cheers rokkit and JK.

"I have a room for life at the Home for the Chronically Groovy."

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