Cold in Summer

Hi there :) I like this idea, but is there any way to add in some more punctuation? I think that would make the individual images stand out a bit better. 'wrapped in paperwork / piled high in a frigid house' is lovely. Perhaps remove a couple of the adjectives in the second stanza? It seems a lot heavier than the first, and so meaning's a little clouded. For example, 'prohibitively', 'unfriendly' - they make us ask unnecessary questions and distract us from the message, which I like but is currently a little lost, I feel. Also, maybe this is just me - 'mini-heatwave found our jackets / and the radiators left on' - I don't quite understand. Maybe adding punctuation would help separate that thought - are you trying to point out that _despite_ the heatwave, the radiators and jackets are left on? I really like this, though! Thanks for sharing. :)